First test footage third party review

We have received much feedback from our first draft. Here are the biggest criticisms:

First draft review

This is the first draft of our film. We have received much feedback from it and know what we want to do to improve.

My initial review is that it follows the storyboard to much making it feel too short and it feels like it is jumping around which can make it confusing. Also I feel that the music is to loud and heavy to fit a thriller however I feel that keeping it greyscale helps to create tension and helps suggest that this is a flashback.

Production Diary: First shoot

Today we start the filming process of our film. We will be using our storyboard and script to help us create our first draft. We will be shooting in a car park and building for the shots we want.

Update: We have now finished our first day of shooting and we feel that we have enough shots to make our first draft however we will see when we edit this together.

Draft of script

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Risk assessment

Potential Hazard	Who’s At Risk?	Existing Control Measures	Risk Rating	Preventative Measures	Responsibilities
Trip Over Tree Stumps	Runner And Camera	N/A	5	Be Careful Plan Route	Identify Trip Hazards
Bright Lights	Actors	Umbrellas Light Shades	3	Turn Down Lights Face Away From Actors Place In Different Angles	Make Sure Lighting Is Not Too Bright
Window- Falling	Actor	N/A	9	Crash Mat Hold Person Ropes	Use A Dummy To Ensure Safety
Running Up/Down Stairs	Actors	Banisters	7	Be Careful Run Slowly	Clear Stairs Of External People
Climbing Fences	Actors	N/A	6	Crash Mats People Spotting	Secure  Fence And Again Use Crash Mats
Running In The Dark	All Involved	Street Lights	4	Check Routes Use Lights Run Slowly	Sensible Footwear And Lights
Wet Weather	All Involved	Check Weather Apps	3	Don’t Run Bring Umbrella	Wear Sensible Shoes
Unknown Individuals	All Involved	N/A	3	Be Careful Of Passers By	Check Areas For External People

We carried out a risk assessment for every area that we feel poses a possible hazard to any individual involved in the filming of our opening. We considered the correct actions to take to prevent the hazard from happening and we gave each a risk rating. Anything over a 5 will be closely monitored and we will put specific measures in place to ensure our safety.

Storyboard Shots 25-30

Storyboard Shots 19-24