First test footage third party review

We have received much feedback from our first draft. Here are the biggest criticisms:

First draft review

This is the first draft of our film. We have received much feedback from it and know what we want to do to improve.

My initial review is that it follows the storyboard to much making it feel too short and it feels like it is jumping around which can make it confusing. Also I feel that the music is to loud and heavy to fit a thriller however I feel that keeping it greyscale helps to create tension and helps suggest that this is a flashback.

Production Diary: First shoot

Today we start the filming process of our film. We will be using our storyboard and script to help us create our first draft. We will be shooting in a car park and building for the shots we want.

Update: We have now finished our first day of shooting and we feel that we have enough shots to make our first draft however we will see when we edit this together.

Draft of script

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